Thursday, October 30, 2014

"I am from"

I am from lorain Which looks so drained. Wind howling threw the trees With everyone on the streets. No good they are, I tell myself live better than that Lorain Lorain Why are you not full of fame? I feel like just the other day growing up this place was so safe, But now life there is just a waste Lorain Lorain I said Why can't we just be widespread We need a future that is solid Everyone grow up and go to college. I am from lorain a place of violence like Standing in the middle of a battle field. Titans is what we hail But early college is good as well. Lorain is where I am from Raised myself since I was young, With no one to lean on they always leave and never stay. Lorain Lorain This is where I am from.
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16 comments:

  1. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:47 AM

    Very good rhyme scheme and your poem was very good

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  2. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    I loved how you said you have no one to lean on and that you raised yourself. This means that you're strong and at the end of the day nobody got you like you got you.

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  3. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    Really love your use of poetic devices like comparing lorain to being in the he middle of a battle field

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  4. Sierra HobbyOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    Good rhyme and I agree with what you said about Lorain.

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  5. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    I like that even though all the troubles it put you through you still want the place to change for the better.

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  6. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    I like how you talked about how much Lorain has changed since you were younger, which it has a lot. I definitely understood where you came from with this.

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  7. AnonymousOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    Your poem is really nice. I like how you used the phrase "lorain, lorain" after every few stanzas

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  8. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    Good poem. Rhymes thru that roof.

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  9. NazBoOctober 31, 2014 at 9:48 AM

    I love that you said I tell myself better than Lorain and how you kept speaking to lorain it almost made me cry you remind me of that one girl from freedom writers idk if I ever told you that great job

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  10. godzierraOctober 31, 2014 at 9:49 AM

    I like all of your rhyming and how you compared Lorain to a battlefield. Good job !

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  11. juarketsquareOctober 31, 2014 at 9:49 AM

    Maria,
    Great reflections in your writing! I like how you personified the city of Lorain and spoke to her in your writing. Well done!

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  12. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:49 AM

    Seems like Lorain is a troubled city but you can change it Maria. Loved your poem and rhymes great job.

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  13. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:49 AM

    Great poem. I like how you said you remember when it was safe.

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  14. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:49 AM

    I like your rhyme great poem girl !

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  15. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:50 AM

    My favorite part was the lorain titans part how people hail to them but we're good as well I think that's absolute right. But I don't have anything against the titans but we not so bad ourselves either.

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  16. UnknownOctober 31, 2014 at 9:50 AM

    I like how you kept saying Lorain Lorain emphasizing that Lorain was a person and you kept asking it questions begging for answers to change.

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